Wednesday, October 12, 2011

Rule Of Three: Lady In Wanting - Part 2



Lady in Wanting - Part 2

Melinda watched her door close.

The solid oak thudded as the brass handle latched, leaving her alone inside the room she’d known all her life. Matching dressers, a wardrobe, and a vanity décored the warm, earthy walls that often made her feel like a maiden lost in the woods. A few of her old, favorite toys and a small playhouse loitered the corners below a collection of dolls. They stared at her, their glass eyes clear and dry. They would not weep for her taken innocence.

All the money in the world could not remove the anguish that stirred her soul. But all her coin was enough to keep the doctor silent.

Melinda took a breath, resisting the sick that dominated her stomach. She looked out the window. The doctor crossed the street, followed by the tailor’s apprentice.

What’s he doing here?

Stepping back, Melinda sat on the edge of her bed. She did not know what to do, feeling trapped and alone. Nothing in her pampered life could prepare her for the harsh reality that she faced. How could she face anyone now? Her parents. Her betrothed. With an utterance, even her best friend would be lost.

A rapping beyond the door disturbed her internal war.

“Melinda?”

Lyra!

Melinda tried to answer, but she swallowed instead.

“I saw the doctor,” her friend carried on. Always the strong-headed one, something Melinda wished she had more constitution of. “Might I come in, or will I catch whatever you caught?”

Dashing for her covers, Melinda made ready to feign the fever that she convinced the doctor to tell whoever inquired of her condition. She reached for the bowl of water on her nightstand, dabbed her fingers in the pool, and rubbed droplets on her face, completing the effect. “Come in.”

Lyra entered, looking lovely as ever. Her long dark hair draped behind her shoulders, her eyes framing amber irises. The normal confidence that defined her was missing. “You look dreadful.”

Melinda laughed, masking a cry. “And you flustered. I’m sorry for leaving you.”

“A short explanation would’ve kept me from upturning the town for you, but all is forgiven.” Lyra strode to the bed and sat by Melinda’s side. “I didn’t mind. Giles walked me here. He seemed just as concerned about your leaving as I was. I invited him to the mask.” Lyra pressed her palm on Melinda’s head. “Strange,” she said. “You look pale, and feverish, but you don’t feel it.”

A sob surfaced in Melinda’s throat. Her silent tears joined the water on her cheeks.

“This can’t be good,” Lyra asserted. “Are you putting this on?”

“I must,” Melinda choked. “I do not know what to do.”

“If not a fever, what has made you ill?”

Finding the words impossible, Melinda raised her head and looked down. Her hand followed and stopped over her middle.

Lyra shot up like a lamppost. “Are you sure?”

Melinda closed her eyes. More tears streamed into her pillow. Only Lyra knew the truth now. Relinquishing her secret brought about an overwhelming feeling of mixed relief and regret.

“Philliam?”

“I’m not sure . . .”

Lyra knelt beside the bed. “There is another?”

“I was to see him tonight,” Melinda said, “but I dare not now.”

“What will you do?” Lyra asked, her voice impressively calm.

Melinda reached, desperately, for Lyra’s hand. “Go in my place? Tell him it’s over?”

Lyra did not answer, her face writhen with torn patience. “No one else knows?”

Melinda shook her head.

“I thought I knew you better, but for you, I will ... if you tell me who the father is ...”


(600 words: A relationship becomes complicated: A character lies to another on an important manner.)


Click here for Part 1.

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That concludes my Rule of Three Blogfest entry for this week. For the sake of repeating, this is an experiment on writing romance--time-period romance, at that!

So. Yeah. If I'm doing it wrong, do tell me.

Now, I couldn't help but notice. Not only did my copy of The Death Cure come in the mail, but this blog has hit 400 members! Thank you everyone, and thank you for tipping the scale, Tina Moss! You guys know how to spoil a dude for his birthday. Now it's my turn to spoil you!

Click back tomorrow for details on some free books!

I'm David, and Barnes & Noble, here I come!


27 comments:

  1. Groovy story:) It's hard to get enough into a single blog post, but I think you did a great job!

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  2. I wasn't expecting that - especially that she's not sure! Secrets do have a way of getting out if people aren't careful :-)

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  3. That really takes it in a different direction. Great intrigue.

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  4. WHY DID IT STOP!! Okay I really liked that :)

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  5. Interesting development. The lies that bind....

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  6. Wow! You did the emotions very well. Can't wait to see if things turn out better for Lyra and Melinda.

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  7. That certainly complicates matters. Well done.

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  8. SOOO jealous that you have The Death Cure. I must get a copy.

    And you aren't doing anything wrong mister. Keep writing it the way you are. Can't wait to read the next one.

    Congrats on 400!

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  9. VERY GOOD DAVID! Way to go. I am extremely impressed.

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  10. Quite a complication - and a truly great friend if she's willing to be the messenger :-)

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  11. Hey, it's your birthday? Happy Birthday! :) Congratulations on 400+ Followers.

    I want to know what happens to these characters--love the writing!

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  12. The father! Ooh...intriguing!

    Been by to have a read – sorry I can’t say too much while judging! Happy birthday and congrats on your 400+ followers! Will pop by tomorrow to find out about them free books. :)

    J.C.

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  13. Poor Melinda!! I am really curious about the father especially since he was not named!

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  14. Happy 400 followers and thanks for posting your writing. I love reading what my fellow bloggers are up to! I also really like the name Lyra. I'm already attached to her, I think. :)

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  15. It seemed all right by me. Of course, I don't read much romance.

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  16. This is really good....realistic portrayal of a conversation like this between two friends...and I guess we will have to wait to see who the father is and whether Melinda gets married to her fiancé if at all..

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  17. Great story, David. I wanted to read more. :)

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  18. Nice opening sentence that hooked me. Powerful story. I like your writing. Waiting for more.

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  19. No, don't stop now! We all want to know who the father is! Actually, who one of the possible fathers is :) Great way to keep up the tension. Can't wait for next week!

    Happy birthday and congratulations on 400+ followers!

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  20. Melinda's plight comes across so strongly. I really enjoyed this.

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  21. Ooo Melinda is a naughty girl! I hope the next installment will be Lyra meeting 'the other man'...juicy :0)

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  22. You're doing fine with romance: someone read a romance I wrote, said it did not fit the RWA rules and formula and that I should not submit it...and it DID get published. So...write what you feel is good.

    congrats on the 400.

    Looking forward to part three.

    Stuart
    co-host #REN3
    Tale Spinning

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  23. Congrats on the 400. That's a big deal.

    And Melinda has been a bad girl. Talk about a lie that truly complicates matters.

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  24. So many complications! I wonder what will happen if Lyra goes to meet Melinda's secret man? I look forward to next week's piece! =)

    And thanks for stopping by my part two post, David!

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  25. Wow, this is going to be a truly sticky one to sort out!

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  26. This is getting interesting now. Lots of people have headed for the killing theme this week (which I've really enjoyed) but this is a strong effort from one of the more subtle prompts. looking forward to wk 3!

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